When families have a meal together it is considered social activity. Do you think eating together is important to people in your country?

It is a good thing for a family to come together at the dining table to eat their meals regardless of their busy schedule. Doing
strengthens family
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as well as
sharing daily activities with one another.
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, if a member of the family is absent, it becomes obvious to everyone present at the dining table. To eat together as a family is to be considered
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one of the first
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of social activity for anyone who is a larger part of any society irrespective of the country in which being
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. In my opinion, having a meal together as a family is not an argument
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whether it's a thing for the rich or for the poor. Sitting together
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at dinner
should be incorporated into the schedule of everyone but more often than not
is not the case. In my country, the busy schedule of most people
coupled with
the fact that most people's parents do not get home in
as a result
of the traffic
as well as
the bad roads which
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down the driving and
due to
all these factors, it makes it almost impossible to get home in
to sit with your loved ones at the dining table to have a decent meal.
To conclude
, I would like to contribute to the fact that if there
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to and fro work in my country, it would encourage more people who didn't or have never
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about spending
with their loved ones will begin to consider and
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the idea of eating together as a family.
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