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Music is played in every society and culture in the world today. Some people believe that music brings only benefits to individuals and societies. Others, however, think that music can have a negative influence on both. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Generally,
music
Suggestion
the music
 is considered to be one of the most popular and ancient modes of human expression. It features largely in all histories and all cultures and indeed has been one of the main ways of passing on cultural traditions to new generations. Many people view
music
 as a positive influence for societies. They
also
 believe that the influence
on
Suggestion
of
 individuals is wholly beneficial as it is a long-established way of communicating and helping us to understand the whole range of human emotion and experience in a more spiritual language than words can represent.
However
, there are different kinds of
music
 and the qualities of classical
music
 traditions are not necessarily part of the
music
 many people
experience
Suggestion
are experiencing
 today. In the modern world, there is a huge
music
 industry that sells piped
music
 to supermarkets and advertisers. We are
also
 constantly exposed to loud modern
music
 from people’s CD players, iPods or car radios. So the view of
music
 today as a kind of noise pollution produced by selfish people, is
also
 a common and negative one, but it is difficult to think of a world without
music
. Certainly, there is bad
music
 that may have negative influences, particularly on the young. But people’s taste in
music
 tends to change as they get older, and it would be difficult to find someone who had no positive musical associations at all. In conclusion, I think that
music
 can have both positive and negative influences on people and society, but it is an integral part of human expression that we cannot really separate from our lives.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Harmony
  • Melody
  • Rhythm
  • Socio-cultural
  • Artistic expression
  • Cognitive development
  • Soundtrack
  • Moral implications
  • Acoustic ecology
  • Intellectual property
  • Authenticity
  • Commercialization
  • Media literacy
  • Sensory overload
  • Acculturation
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