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Some British families decide not to buy televisions because they influence the development of the creativity of children. What do you think?

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With the rapid development of science and
technology
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,
television
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, as a new invention
in
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of
 the 20th century
is becoming
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was becoming
 very populous in people’s life. People can be informed of the latest news and enjoy the
colorful
having striking color
colourful
 programs at home. In my opinion,
television
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 will not affect children’s creativity as exaggerated.
Firstly
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,
television
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 is the most effective tool to inform children of the latest news and scientific development over the world.
Television
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 tells us the recent development of some researches,
such
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 as
clone
a weightlift in which the barbell is lifted to shoulder height and then jerked overhead
clean
technology
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, Genetic breakthroughs, the new computing
technology
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 and so on, which can stimulate the imagination of children and encourage them to carry out relevant experiments, making new findings and breakthroughs in their study.
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, some programs like adventures and geography can enlarge children’s
knowledge
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 of
scope
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the scope
. With the emerge of information
technology
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, the
knowledge
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 in textbooks cannot satisfy children’s curiosity any more. Children need to learn wider
knowledge
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 and know more about our world. Programs like adventures can cultivate children’s creativity and the ability to tackle
difficulty
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difficult
; programs like geography can teach
children
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children with knowledge about
child's knowledge about
child's child's knowledge about
children's knowledge about
knowledge
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 about different countries in the world and initiate their aspiration to know about the nature; programs about science can inspire children’s interest in science and
technology
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.
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, the improper programs on
television
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 sometimes play negative role in the growth of children. The shots about violence, crimes and pornography contents are making children walk on the criminal road. To sum up, I believe that
television
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 will not influence children’s creativity. But meanwhile, the government and the whole society should do their utmost to prohibit the unhealthy contents on TV and provide the children with a clean growing environment.
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