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Fresh water has always been a limited resource in some parts of the world. Today, however, growing worldwide demand has made this a global problem. What are the causes of the increased demand and what measure could governments and individuals take to respond to this problem?

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Water
 is the ultimate source of life on
this
 planet earth. Fresh
water
 sources are limited to the glaciers which work as storage tanks at the top. An ever increasing demand of fresh
water
 due to a rapid surge in population of earth is a source of anxiety for many these days. I will discuss few causes of a rise in demand of fresh
water
 with possible solutions to
this
 problem. The population of the world is rapidly increasing due to high birth rate in developing countries, reduction in mortality rates and increase in the life expectancy.
Consequently
, demand for fresh
water
 is constantly on the rise
for
Suggestion
in
 consumption, washing and bathing purposes.
Similarly
, to feed a larger population, agricultural utilization of
water
 is
also
 escalating
overtime
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over time
.
Moreover
, in
this
 era of industrialization, more fresh
water
 is being consumed by various industries especially in developed countries. The government has to play his role to overcome
this
 problem of
water
 scarcity.
Firstly
, those countries where sea
water
 is available, more desalination plants should be constructed
to use
Suggestion
using
 it
instead
 of fresh
water
.
Secondly
, there is a need to construct new dams to conserve and store the fresh
water
 for usage at the hour of need and prevent its wastage especially in the floods.
Finally
, some legislation should be done to make recycling plants compulsory for the industries to reuse the
water
 without wasting. The
water
 should be conserved at Individual level as well by preventing its undue wastage for washing and bathing purposes. Recycling techniques can be used at homes
also
 by using, the
water
 produced by washing and bathing, for the flush tanks in bathrooms. To conclude, it is obvious that the fresh
water
 needs are constantly increasing and all sectors of the
society including
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society, including
 government,
businessman
Suggestion
businessmen
the businessman
 and individuals have to contribute to overcome the menace of
water
 wastage.
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