Some parents believe children’s leisure activities should be always educational, but others think it will cause more pressure on children. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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era, parents concerned about their children's

leisure

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more than

ever. Some people

belive

accept as true; take to be true

believe

on education

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being connected either logically or causally or by shared characteristics

leisure

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activities and spend lots of money to send their

off springs

the immediate descendants of a person

offsprings

to different extra curriculum classes and in other

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people give full liberty to their children about their spare

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. Now the question is what is the best way for children to spend their

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time

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issue in detail.

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of all, the idea of giving freedom to toddlers about how to utilize their spare

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, there might be few citizens who assure that good idea let the kid's decide how they want allocate their free

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, I totally disagree, and the reason is, we all know that infants are not able to distinguish what is

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characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.

positive

for them and what is bad for them and as far as they concerned they only want play and

jubliant

joyful and proud especially because of triumph or success

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, giving freedom to infants about their break period is not a constructive idea.

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, having educational recreational activities is

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adequate alternative. Parents can supervise their children’s spare times, they can figure out what their adolescent like

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Most

and what are their interests, through those

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interests

they can plan their tasks so they can have joy and get educated simultaneously.

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, when I was a

child my

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child, my

parents had sent me to a Football school, so I spent lots of my recreational times learning Football, and the reason was that my parents knew that I loved physical activities. In conclusion, I personally believe on

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educational, leisure

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activities for children but it

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It's

important to not put extra pressure on newborns and make sure they enjoy while

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have

educational

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educational, leisure

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activities.

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Some parents believe children’s leisure activities should be always educational, but others think it will cause more pressure on children. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

In many countries today, if people want to find work, they have to move away from their friends and their families. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience.

Older people often choose to spend money on themselves (e.g. on holidays) rather than save money for their children after retirement. Is this a positive or negative development?

Recent research has shown that within the European Union the largest difference between the earnings of men and women exists in the UK. Many equal rights campaigners believe that immediate action should be taken to close the gender pay gap. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

Some people suggest that a country should try to produce all the food for its population and import as little food as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?