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In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution?

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Man people are of the view that growing traffic congestion can be solved by adding some kind of charge on personal car use and use the collected funds for
betterment
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the betterment
 of public
transportation
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. In my opinion, there are both pros and cons of
this
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 approach that need careful evaluation. On the
one
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 hand, asking people who own a car to pay some kind of fees serves dual benefit.
Firstly
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, it discourages people to purchase new cars as they would be aware of additional expenses in terms owning a car.
This
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, thereby, would lead to reduction in cars available on roads and contributing to
decongestion
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.
Secondly
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, taxes on personal vehicle and additional revenue generated due to more people using public vehicles would help
government
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the government
governments
 to build a fund that can be used to increase
number
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the number
 of public
transportation
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 vehicles,
facilites
a building or place that provides a particular service or is used for a particular industry
facilities
, safety and security, thereby, promoting public
transportation
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. In
one
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 of the surveys
this
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 year, 90 percent felt that additional funds
needs
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need
 to be deployed on improvement of local public
transportation
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facilites
a building or place that provides a particular service or is used for a particular industry
facilities
.
On the other hand
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, in a developed country, people would tend to view it as their right to be able to move around from
one
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 place to another in luxury of their private vehicle. Having to pay a
lot
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 for
this
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 convenience might irk middle and upper class.
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, there can be
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lot
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lots
 of situations when
one
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 cannot simply always rely on public transport.
For example
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, in case of an accident at home or medical emergency,
one
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 cannot just wait for public
transportation
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. Relying only on
public mode
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public modes
on
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of
 commuting would be especially for
elder
advanced in years; ('aged' is pronounced as two syllables)
older
 and
disbaled
incapable of functioning as a consequence of injury or illness
disabled
 people along with small kids.
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, bringing public commuting experience to a level where everyone can commute easily at any time for any amount of distance safely and securely might need
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lot
Suggestion
lots
 of expenditure on these
facilites
a building or place that provides a particular service or is used for a particular industry
facilities
. Albeit, it still may not be enough. So, in my opinion, while there are benefits of less cars plying on
road
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the road
roads
 leading to uncluttered roads and funds for public mode of transport,
one
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 should not ignore hardships that citizens may have to face due to
such
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 a move. Traffic is high,
afterall
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after all
, due to
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lot
Suggestion
lots
 of people preferring to use own vehicle. Maybe,
government
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the government
 should work towards
gradual shift
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a gradual shift
 in preference of people from using public means
instead
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 of private means for transport.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Traffic congestion
  • Emissions
  • Revenue generation
  • Public dissatisfaction
  • Political issues
  • Financial burden
  • Environmental benefits
  • Efficiency and accessibility
  • Taxation
  • Heavily taxing
  • Private car owners
  • Fund improvements
  • Discourage the use
  • Healthier environment
  • Public transport quality
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