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In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution?

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Many people are of the view that growing traffic congestion can be solved by adding some kind of charge on personal car use and use the collected funds for
betterment
Suggestion
the betterment
 of public
transportation
. In my opinion, there are both pros and cons of
this
 approach. On the
one
 hand, asking people who own a car to pay fees serves dual benefit.
Firstly
, it discourages people to purchase new cars as they would be aware of additional expenses in terms of owning a car.
This
, thereby, would contribute to
decongestion
 on roads.
Secondly
, taxes on personal vehicle and additional revenue generated due to more people using public vehicles would help
government
Suggestion
the government
governments
 to build a fund that can be used on increasing public vehicles,
facilites
a building or place that provides a particular service or is used for a particular industry
facilities
, safety and security, thereby, promoting public
transportation
. In
one
 of the surveys
this
 year, 90 percent felt that additional funds
needs
Suggestion
need
 to be deployed on improvement of public
transportation
facilites
a building or place that provides a particular service or is used for a particular industry
facilities
.
On the other hand
, there can be
lot
Suggestion
lots
 of situations when
one
 cannot simply always rely on public transport.
For example
, in case of an accident at home or some medical emergency,
one
 cannot just wait for public
transportation
.
Also
, relying only on public mode for commuting would be
tough especially
Accept comma addition
tough, especially
 for kids and elder and
disbaled
incapable of functioning as a consequence of injury or illness
disabled
 people.
Additionally
, bringing public commuting experience to a level where everyone can commute easily at any time for any distance safely and securely might need not be practically feasible. So, in my opinion,
benefits
Suggestion
the benefits
 of less cars on
road
Suggestion
the road
 leading to
uncluttering
Suggestion
unclutter
 and generation of funds for public facilities,
one
 should not ignore hardships that citizens may have to face due to
such
 a move. Maybe,
government
Suggestion
the government
 should work towards
gradual shift
Suggestion
a gradual shift
 in preference of people from private to public mode of transport.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Traffic congestion
  • Emissions
  • Revenue generation
  • Public dissatisfaction
  • Political issues
  • Financial burden
  • Environmental benefits
  • Efficiency and accessibility
  • Taxation
  • Heavily taxing
  • Private car owners
  • Fund improvements
  • Discourage the use
  • Healthier environment
  • Public transport quality
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