The only way to improve the safety on our own road is to have stricter punishment for driving offenders. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is irrefutable that violations of traffic rules and regulations and

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offensive

behaviors

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviours

behaviour

exhibited by drivers are major causes of road accident. I agree that

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actions should be punishable depending on the degree of

offense

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the offence

offence

office

with the following reasons. A person driving without a driver’s license should be made to pay a huge fine.

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is because

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a person might not have learnt driving the proper way which is partaking in driving classes and a test afterwards.

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, it is assumed that the individual has no sound knowledge about driving and

safety

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, in so many Countries,

person’s

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a person’s

the person’s

under the ages of 18 are not allowed to drive.

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an individual if caught should face a strict punishment.

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, the media houses always sensitize individuals on the dangers of drinking and driving. In order

wards

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to ward

, these offenders deserve stern disciplinary actions when caught.

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, other forms of road

safety

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violations

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overspeeding

spend more than available of (a budget)

overspending

, driving without a

seatbealt

a safety belt used in a car or plane to hold you in your seat in case of an accident

seatbelt

, not using a

carseat

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car seat

for a minor may require withdrawal of the driver’s license, followed by community service. Through

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means,

safety

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is ensured on the road.

Most importantly

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More importantly

, drivers should be made to attend refresher courses yearly on driving and

safety

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, to enhance their driving skill. In conclusion, I agree that punishment should be given to driving

offender but

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offender, but

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should solely depend

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the level of

offense

a lack of politeness; a failure to show regard for others; wounding the feelings or others

offence

the driver commits.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

232 words

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deterrent
infractions
harsher penalties
over-policing
driver education
automated traffic enforcement
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legal representation
substance abuse
awareness campaigns
road infrastructure
legal measures
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