The only way to improve the safety on our own road is to have stricter punishment for driving offenders. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is irrefutable that violations of traffic rules and regulations and
also
offensive
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviours
behaviour
exhibited by drivers are major causes of road accident. I agree that
such
actions should be punishable depending on the degree of
offense
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the offence
offence
office
with the following reasons. A person driving without a driver’s license should be made to pay a huge fine.
This
is because
such
a person might not have learnt driving the proper way which is partaking in driving classes and a test afterwards.
Therefore
, it is assumed that the individual has no sound knowledge about driving and
safety
.
Secondly
, in so many Countries,
person’s
Suggestion
a person’s
the person’s
under the ages of 18 are not allowed to drive.
Such
an individual if caught should face a strict punishment.
Finally
, the media houses always sensitize individuals on the dangers of drinking and driving. In order
wards
Suggestion
to ward
, these offenders deserve stern disciplinary actions when caught.
Furthermore
, other forms of road
safety
violations
such
as
overspeeding
spend more than available of (a budget)
overspending
, driving without a
seatbealt
a safety belt used in a car or plane to hold you in your seat in case of an accident
seatbelt
, not using a
carseat
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car seat
for a minor may require withdrawal of the driver’s license, followed by community service. Through
this
means,
safety
is ensured on the road.
Most importantly
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More importantly
, drivers should be made to attend refresher courses yearly on driving and
safety
, to enhance their driving skill. In conclusion, I agree that punishment should be given to driving
offender but
Accept comma addition
offender, but
this
should solely depend
of
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on
the level of
offense
a lack of politeness; a failure to show regard for others; wounding the feelings or others
offence
the driver commits.
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