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Should private schools receive government funding? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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It is often argued that only public schools should be eligible to receive
state
Use synonyms
 funding.
This
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 essay will analyse
this
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 notion and will give examples from experience to demonstrate points and support arguments.
Firstly
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, private schools charge
considerable amount
Suggestion
a considerable amount
 of fees from the parents, in
comparision
the act of examining resemblances
comparison
 to public institutions.
Additionally
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, parents pay annual maintenance, development and extra curricular fees which the school asks to run it.
For instance
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, Modern High, the best private school in south Gurgaon, charges around 2.5
lakhs
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 an annum, out of which tuition is only 1.25
lakhs
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. They are already receiving ample funding
from
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for
 children for all extra activities school offers.
Secondly
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, private schools
dont
do not
don't
 give admission to economically backward kids. They only attract rich children and families who can easily pay the tuition.
Alternatively public
Suggestion
Alternatively, public
Alternative public
Alternative Alternative public
 schools don’t discriminate on
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 basis.
Moreover
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, receiving
additinaly
further or added
additional
 funds from the
state
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 would only project a wrong picture of
further
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 favouring
this
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 discrimination, from the government.
Finally
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, the growing number of private schools in any
state
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, would
also
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 limit the amount of funding all schools receive.
This
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 would significantly reduce the funding provided to public schools, who might not be able to sustain themselves with limited budget. As
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such it
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such, it
 can be concluded that private academic institutions
dont
do not
don't
necessary
Suggestion
necessarily
 require funding from the
state
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. The educational budget is best suited to be provided to
piblic
not private; open to or concerning the people as a whole
public
 schools, which is probably their only revenue stream.
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