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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The
diagram
 gives a clear understanding of
wave-energy
machine
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machines
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 through various component connections and their
flow
 of control. Through the
diagram
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 we can clearly determine the action and reaction of components and
generation
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the generation
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 of
electricity
 through water
waves
. The
diagram
 illustrates the working of
wave-energy
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the wave-energy
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 machine. It depicts the direction
flow
 of
waves
,
air
, turbine rotatory motions and various other components like
electricity
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an electricity
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 generator
that is
 linked with
turbine
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the turbine
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. The
diagram
 represents the installation costs
basing
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based
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 on the criteria of large
waves
 and small
waves
. From the first
diagram
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 we can observe that the
wave-energy
 machine is divided into two chambers. One is
upper
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the upper
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 chamber consists of
turbine
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a turbine
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 and
electricity
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an electricity
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 generator connected to it. We can see the directions given to represent
air
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airflow
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flow
. The turbines rotate in the direction of
air
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airflow
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flow
 and
thus
electricity
 is generated by the
electricity
 generator. The lower chamber deals with water levels which
is
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are
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main
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the main
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 reason for
air
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airflow
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flow
 and we can
also
 see the wave direction coming towards
lower
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the lower
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 chamber. The other
diagram
 gives a chance
for
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comparison
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 of large
waves
 and small
waves
. If
waves
 are larger,
output
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the output
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 will be high and installation cost will be high. If
waves
 are smaller,
output
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the output
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 will be low and installation cost will be low. Large
waves
 occur at lower altitudes
when
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while
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 smaller
waves
 occur at high altitudes. The location of
wave-energy
 machines depends upon the occurrence of large and small
waves
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words diagram, wave-energy, flow, electricity, waves, air with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represents" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "waves" was used 12 times.
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