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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices
I agree to the fullest extent that we now have too many choices. The aforementioned statement is virtually true for every
aspects
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aspect
 of our lives. Thanks to the advancement of technology, we are now left with
myriad
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a myriad
the myriad
 of options in whatever things we engaged in. We as a species have developed so many products, services, areas
os
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OS
os'
 expertise, fields of study, philosophical notions, religious doctrines, and so many
counless
too numerous to be counted
countless
 other things that very often
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 not these
baffle
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baffles
 us. At times
abundance
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the abundance
 of choices
leaves
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is left
 with no choice at all. I
remeber
recall knowledge from memory; have a recollection
remember
 once I had to choose an area of concentration for my secondary school certificate. I
remeber
recall knowledge from memory; have a recollection
remember
 vividly to
this
 date how hesitant I was about selecting my major. It was not that I didn't know what my options were,
on the contrary
, it was the very fact of having so many options, so many areas to choose from that I was left clueless. Of course I did
finally
 choose a
mjor
of greater importance or stature or rank
major
 after hours of pondering over
possible consequences
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the possible consequences
.
This
 story of mine only serves to illustrate the rich variety of options we have developed over the years as a species, and to show that
this
 privilege of having many options in every
aspects
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aspect
 of our life can sometimes really be problematic.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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