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There is a good deal of evidence that increasing car use is contributing to global warming and having other undesirable effects on people’s health and well-being. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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There is a great evidence for the rising
usage
 of cars. Rising global warming and other effects on
human’s
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human
 health and well-being are viewed as a potential problem caused by
increasing use
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the increasing use
 of automobiles.
This
easy
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easement
 will discuss why more
usage
 of cars has led to rise in temperature of
earth
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the earth
 and created a
lot
 of problems to human health. More
usage
 of cars has created an impact by
rising
increasing in quantity or value
raising
 the earth’s temperature as they
release
 a
lot
 of toxic
gases
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gas
. They
release
 gases like carbon
di oxide
an oxide containing two atoms of oxygen in the molecule
dioxide
, nitrogen etc. Especially carbon
di oxide
an oxide containing two atoms of oxygen in the molecule
dioxide
 has a major role in contributing to the global warming because they do not allow the essential gases to show their presence. They dominate all other gases. It does not give space to oxygen
as a result
 which increased the heat in the atmosphere. These
gases
an occurrence of something
cases
 will not allow the trees to occupy their space and
as a result
 all the
tress
a tall perennial woody plant having a main trunk and branches forming a distinct elevated crown; includes both gymnosperms and angiosperms
trees
are gone
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is gone
 in vain. After the loss of trees, there was
reduction
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a reduction
 in the amount of rain as they are
corelated
mutually related
correlated
correlate
 to each other. Overall, it illustrates that
release
 of toxic substances reduce
rainfall level which
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the rainfall level, which
the rainfall level which
rainfall levels which
 leads to the rise of heat in the earth. People’s physical health and well-being is
also
 being damaged a
lot
, as there are no activities
to
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of
in
 the body
expect
take exception to
except
 the way the humans tend to move from place to place. But nowadays even these are being replaced by automobiles which has initiated the growth of diseases. Lack of physical activity has ruined one’s life by making a person become overweight. Obesity is one the important and base reason for
lot
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a lot
lots
 of problems like heart attack, pressure etc. These are all dramatically growing as the days pass by because there is
minimum contribution
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the minimum contribution
 given by the
movable
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moving
 body parts. To conclude, I strongly agree that the rising
usage
 of vehicles has played a major role in rising global warming and by
also
 having unwanted effects on human’s and their well-being as they
release
 a
lot
 of toxic
gases
Suggestion
gas
 and reduce the need for physical activities.
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