In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem?

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Even though lots of development
have been built
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has been built
in
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on
agriculture, still many people are poor and starving throughout the
world
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.
there
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are
plethora
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a plethora
of reasons behind
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crisis but
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crisis, but
these demerits can be mitigated by taking some actions.
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of all, it would be good to start by looking at some reasons
,
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why people still go hungry. The
first
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and foremost reason is
war
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. In details,
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we are living in a modern
world
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,
war
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is still ongoing in the some areas of the earth, due to lack of understanding between countries. Syria take as an example
,
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,
having many
crisis
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crises
because of running
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war
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a war
.
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, citizen of that
country
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are starving
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is starving
,
also
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having many serious
deseas
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diseases
disease
.
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, unfair capitalism is another cause of food shortage.
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, in some countries, strict and uncontrollable economical issues
are exist
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are existing
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why, one party is getting wealthy and
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
are going to be poor.
For example
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, Nigeria, is facing problem regarding capital distribution to
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of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
dwellers. As a consequence,
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of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
economy is not that much growing what it would
expected
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expect
.
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, there are various ways can be followed for
minimiznig
make small or insignificant
minimizing
this
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problem.
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,
war
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should be stopped by
negociating
discuss the terms of an arrangement
negotiating
between countries. Even though it would be difficult, by
compromizing
making or willing to make concessions
compromising
some benefits, we can bring peace to
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universe again.
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, the helping level could be increased from nation to nation. Which
i
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I
mean, when one developed
country
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offers helping hand towards a poor
country
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that time underdeveloped
country
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get many donations from healthy
country
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.
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, government should provide equal opportunities to
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of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
public.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
that
the poorer
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the poor
will not be poorer, they will get support. In conclusion, it can be said that, by controlling unequality throughout the
world
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and
adpting
choose and follow; as of theories, ideas, policies, strategies or plans
adopting
adapting
aferementioned
being the one previously mentioned or spoken of
aforementioned
steps, people will get a healthier, starving free
world
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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