Keeping animals in captivity is cruel. There is no reason for zoos to exist in the 21st century.

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There are many people who question the
existence
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of zoos in the 21st of
century
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. In their opinion, keeping animals in captivity is unethical. While I do agree with
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view, I do not think that zoos should be abolished. In spite of all the arguments against the
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of zoos, the truth is that they still benefit both humans and animals. Zoos provide education. They give us an opportunity to observe wild animals from close quarters and learn about their
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
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. Another very important benefit of maintaining zoos is that they save many endangered species from extinction. Zoos provide them with a safe environment where they can live and reproduce. Without zoos many exotic species of animals would have disappeared from earth. The argument against the
existence
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of zoos stems from the fact that
they
of them or themselves
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ill-treat animals.
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true to a certain extent. In many zoos, animals are kept in small enclosures where they cannot even move about.
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zoos exist with the sole purpose of making money by exploiting animals. In my opinion,
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establishments should be closed down as we have no right to use or exploit other forms of life for our benefit. Having said that, there are
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zoos that allow animals to live in protected environments that are closer to the wilderness. Animals living in
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zoos do enjoy some amount of freedom. They might even be able to hunt small animals that the zoo authorities throw into their ‘territories’. Life in
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zoos actually benefits these animals because they are safe from poachers who might
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have killed them for their skin, teeth or tusks. To conclude, when we consider the benefits of zoos, it is not hard to see that the argument against their
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does not hold water. Zoos do protect animals.
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of abolishing them, what we need to do is to make them more animal friendly.
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