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A colleague gave you a book which you used for your presentation. Write a letter to your colleague. In your letter, you should say: •What the presentation was about, •Why the presentation was important, •How did the book help you? You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear …………….. ,

Dear Mr.Terey, I would like to thank you for the
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 which you gave me to read, "Attitude is Everything". It was proven to be very helpful for my presentation. First of all, as I started to read the
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, I loved the content , and it kept my day busy, in order to complete it as soon as possible. You would not believe that I have completed it within just three days. From
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, I gathered the positivity and enhanced my leadership skills, which were mandatory for growth.
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, in the next week, I had to present myself on
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 topic towards the fellow team leader.
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 presentation was to test my leadership capabilities to be a future team leader.
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 reason, it was very crucial for me to make an impact on seniors via
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 slideshow by sharing my ideas , including a few illustrations. I have an idea regarding leadership characteristics.
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, I am not aware of how to stay in a positive attitude when one is at the stage of being a leader. For
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 which is given by you, brought me the ladder for the same , and step by step, I made a breakdown of it and wrapped everything in my presentation to make it understandable. I would appreciate it if you gave me
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 when I needed it most , and it became the job saviour for me. Once again, I thank you for the same. Yours faithfully, Heta Arora

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task achievement
Try to clearly explain the importance of the presentation in more detail. Adding specific examples can make your point stronger.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has one clear idea. Sometimes ideas mix together, which can confuse the reader.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple transitions between ideas to make your writing flow better. Words like 'first', 'next', and 'finally' can help with this.
content
You clearly thanked your colleague for the book, showing good manners and appreciation.
tone
The letter has a friendly and respectful tone, which is excellent for this type of communication.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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