The graph below shows the types of transport used by tourists who visited New Zealand from five countries in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The provided column graph reveals a comparative study regarding the visitors who came from five nations

used

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who used

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the various transportation modes for travelling to New

Zeland

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Zealand

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in 2004.

Unit

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was measured in percentage.

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, it can be clearly observed that

Japanese

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the Japanese

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travelled mostly by

car

Whilist

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Whilst

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, the other visitors preferred the

car

the most. Now, turning to the statistics, the highest number of

british

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tourists travelled by

car

which was 60% among the other tourists, and around 36%

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of british

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british

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people preferred air and ferry for travelling.

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, the number of

british

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and german visitors was about 19%. The approximately 52%

german

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of german

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used

car

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cars

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being

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higher than

ferry

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ferries

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by 4%.

However

this

ratio was almost half in air transportation and coach was used by 20% german. There was seen a

decrease

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trend in air and coach

transportationn

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transportation

proportion

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the proportion

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Japanese

, Korean and Australian. Now moving towards the remaining information, the number of

Japanese

and Korean tourists was the least which accounted for around 10% and in

car

transportation,

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a fluactuation

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fluactuation

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fluctuation

fluctuations

trend was observed in

Japanese

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Japan

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Korean

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Korea

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and

Australian

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Australia

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Vocabulary: Replace the words japanese, car with synonyms.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

177 words

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The graph below shows the types of transport used by tourists who visited New Zealand from five countries in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Today, many people use the internet and smartphones to transfer money to friends, family, and businesses. Is this a positive or negative development?

Developing medical treatments and medications is expensive. Some people think that it is better to spend the money on health-oriented preventive education. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

3)Although countries with long average working hours are economically successful, this often has some negative social consequences. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

When a new town is planned, it is more important to develop public parks and sports facilities than shopping centers for people to spend their free time in. To what extent do agree or disagree?

It is believed that citizens should pay tax to show their social responsibility. Others believe citizens should take other responsibilities. Discuss both views and give your opinion.