The bar chart illustrates the proportion of people who consumed five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK over 8 years, which is from 2001 to 2008.

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of people who consumed five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the

UK over 8 years, which is from 2001 to 2008.
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bar chart illustrates the proportion of people who consumed five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK over 8 years, which
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from 2001 to 2008.
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of men
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gradually increased before declining since the
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2007 to 2008.
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2007 respectively. In 2001, the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables was around 18%, which is relatively stable up to 2003. From
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gradually increased before falling to almost 28% by 2008. In
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similar way, the proportion
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was around 22% in the
year
2001 and these values rose slowly up to 2006, before experiencing
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to 33% by the
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2008. With regards to the children, these values were lower than male and female. In 2001, the
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was around 12% and plateaued over
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2 years. From
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on, it started to increase, before declining to almost 27% by the
year
2008.
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