Some people work for the same organization all their life time.Others think that it is better to work for various organization .Discuss both side and give opinion.

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Almost majority
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The almost majority
of the people spend their
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life time
the period during which something is functional (as between birth and death)
lifetime
on working
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Some people prefer to extend and elaborate their working journey in
same institution
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the same institution
,
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,
while, others believed that working
on
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with
for
several firms can create
better platform
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a better platform
for one's
life
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.
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Both the views are critiqued before reaching to the reasonable decision
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Let's begin, by looking at the workers who desire to
work
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in
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with
same organization
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the same organization
for their entire
life
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.They believed that it will create a friendly environment and mutual co-
relationship
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related
relate
relates
with the staffs as workers are familiar to each other in duration of long time
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Besides
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this
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,
a
longterm
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long term
work
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can prosperously
boosty
increase
boost
up their position of
work
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and even leads them to the stages of promotions.
For instance
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,
a financial
officer will
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officer, will
become the finance executive within 8 years
,
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,
if they
work
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in
same organization
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the same organization
.
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A permanent job not only enhances the productive
skills but
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skills, but
enriches the people to uplift their better lifestyles and secure their
carriers
the particular occupation for which you are trained
careers
. Turning to
other side
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the other side
, working for several companies
provide
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provides
a fate to involved in different environment as the personnels and staffs are totally different
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Thus
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it increases the ability to form good social circle
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Additionally
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people having higher experience can demand for higher
renemuration
something that remunerates
remuneration
which
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Which
is a good sign for nurturing carriers as well as
life
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standard
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Furthermore
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,
workers can
improved
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improve
ttheir
of them or themselves
their
there
additional skills
,
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,
if they
work
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in diverse positions. A perfect instance is that mu cousin
,
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,
Riwaj
,
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,
learned new
technuques
a practical method or art applied to some particular task
techniques
about using technologies working with various companies under several
projects
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Projects
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hence
(used to introduce a logical conclusion) from that fact or reason or as a result
Hence
,
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,
he can apply for several
position
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positions
on
demanding vacancy
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demand, vacancy
demand vacancy
realated
being connected either logically or causally or by shared characteristics
related
with
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to
projects as well as technologies. To conclude, working with same firm gives more job
stabiility but
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stability, but
stability but
engaging on several
comapnies
an institution created to conduct business
companies
can
borderns
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Borderns
the level of horizon
educationally
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educations
,
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,
provides experience offers to current running trends which I believe required in today's
competitiive
involving competition or competitiveness
competitive
world. ,
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