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Everyone should start eating vegetarian because it helps improve health. To what extent do you agree?

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Although
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 it is believed by many that eating vegetarian
food
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 helps sustain good
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health but
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health, but
 it is
also
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 to be considered that doctors recommend to include fish and
meat
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 to maintain good
health
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. In my
opinion having
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opinion, having
 a mix of vegetarian and non-vegetarian eatables, which provides enough vitamin and proteins, helps keep good
health
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. There are people who believe that eating vegetarian
food
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such
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 as pulses, green vegetables,
fruits milk
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fruit, milk
fruit milk
 is ideal for maintaining good
health
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.
For
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instance vegetables
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instance, vegetables
such
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 as carrot, radish helps build the muscles stronger and increase the immunity, which leads to lesser suffering due to joint pains during old ages,
moreover
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 dairy products, which are made of milk,
provides
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provide
 different types of vitamins to the human body and keeps
human body
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the human body
 from weakness. At the same time, there are people who believe that consuming
meat
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 is good for
health
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 compared to eating vegetarian. Eating
meat
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 provides strength to the muscles when consumed in a correct amount. It is often seen people in the profession of bodybuilding consume a considerable amount of
meat
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, to gain the energy, which ultimately leads to strengthening body muscles and build stamina. Even it is recommended by physicians to include at least egg/fish, in the daily breakfast to avoid skipping protein required, for the good
health
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. I have a partial agreement on the fact that everyone should eat only vegetarian, as vegetarian
food
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 does not provide all
kind
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kinds
 of proteins and vitamins required for good
health
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, and
thus
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 it is always a good idea to include non-vegetarian
food
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 in the diet.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chronic diseases
  • nutrition
  • plant-based foods
  • gut flora
  • fiber content
  • saturated fats
  • mental health
  • nutritional deficiencies
  • vitamin B12
  • iron
  • omega-3 fatty acids
  • dietary restrictions
  • vegetarian diet
  • whole grains
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