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In many countries plastic shopping bags are the main type of rubbish. They cause water and land pollution, so they should be banned. To what extent do you agree?

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Plastic
 bags' usage is becoming popular day by day in all over the world.
it
Suggestion
It
 is argued that
plastic
 bags should
be not used because
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not be used because
 it pollutes our environment. I completely agree with
this
 statement.
First
 of all, I believe that it causes a lot of problems,
such
 as when the
plastic
 is produced it makes a lot of
pollution
 and
also
 come new toxic gases that are harmful to the human body.
secondly
Suggestion
Secondly
, few people use it and throw it wherever they want so in
this
 way it damages nature.
it
Suggestion
It
 spreads dangerous and small particles of itself.
thirdly
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Thirdly
, we
can not
can not
cannot
 destroy
plastic
 bags if we try it to burn it the
pollution
 comes.
it
Suggestion
It
 takes thousands of years to
desolve
become weaker
dissolve
dissolved
dissolves
 in the soil. Very few citizens know the consequences of
such
 things.
instead
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Instead
 of
it they
Accept comma addition
it, they
 should use fabric bags that are
ecofriendly
.
it
Suggestion
It
 causes water
pollution
 because we had beings throw
plastic
 bags in the sea and water creatures eat it as a food in
such
 way it generates damage to the atmosphere.
On the other hand
, few people think
plastic
 bags would be banned because the prices of or are reasonable.
it
Suggestion
It
 has a long life. We can find it in different colours. It is easy to carry things in the
plastic
 bag.
it
Suggestion
It
 is a strong material.
it
Suggestion
It
 can be recycled. To conclude, I strongly believe that
plastic
 bags should be stopped because they are the prime reason for increasing
pollution
.
the
Suggestion
The
 usage of fabric and paper bag should be promoted
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