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Some people believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn, and should not have to pay tax to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, people feel resentful to spend money
on
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to
 the government. For some people, it is considered unnecessary to pay tax to the governing body, which could
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 be kept for themselves. I completely disagree with
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 concept and wish to convey that paying tax must be a compulsion.
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, paying a stipend amount to the political body is important because, they are the ones who provide us with basic facilities. Take the US government
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, they have provided free of cost parks, libraries, street light and so on. These initiatives are taken to support the public and
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, they need to spend from their pockets in order to
benifit
financial assistance in time of need
benefit
 from the policies.
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, authorities
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 taken up initiatives to help the country in various aspects
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 as, foreign exchange programs. To exemplify
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 a situation, the president of India, took up the challenge to clean the country by eliminating the use of plastic in any form.
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 procedures take time and money to replace the non
renuable
that can be renewed or extended
renewable
 sources.
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, with the tax payers income, it was successful in eradicating about 70 percent of plastic within one year. To conclude, it is
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one's
 responsibility to pay from their pockets
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 of stacking it in their houses.
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 gradually gets into action and
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 to be an advantage for the entire country. It could
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 inspire the youth to take up
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innivations
a creation (a new device or process) resulting from study and experimentation
innovations
innovation
invasions
 in the future.
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Word Count

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • contribute
  • welfare
  • public services
  • progressive taxation
  • distribution of wealth
  • civic duty
  • social cohesion
  • tax evasion
  • economic disparities
  • social unrest
  • individual rights
  • societal responsibilities
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