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Question- Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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These days, people are listening to not only local but
also
 international musics,
therefore
, it is often believed that
music
 can make all people together regardless of culture and age. Personally, I think it is not feasible to create the type of
music
 which is well-suited to all
ages
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ages, although
although
 it would act as a medium to connect people having their own unique cultures, and I will support my opinion in
this
 essay. The main reason why
music
 can make people having different customs become the one is that it is the art that every country possesses and that can make people motivated, charitable and energetic.
That is
 why the competition in which players from many countries are
participated
Suggestion
participating
, usually yield an official anthem to let players and audiences from separate destinations dance and react to. Waka Waka, the official song for the 2010 FIFA World Cup, is one of the best examples because football enthusiasms from all over the world were significantly influenced by the lyrics and the rhythm during
this
 period. Bridging between two extreme age groups with
music
 is assumed to be impossible for a number of reasons. One major contributing point is that people are more interested in the genre of
music
 which was trending in their young
age while
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age, while
 the trend of the composition and singing styles are changing rapidly from year to year. Classical
music
,
for instance
, is the favourite one for elderly
people
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people, although
although
 it may be unbearable for the younger generation. In conclusion,
although
music
 can bring people of diverse cultures together by giving motivation and
inflencing
a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc
influencing
 people's mind with catchy tunes and lyrics, the taste and feelings to the composition and beats between young and elderly people are too opposite to make them close.
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