In many countries children are engaged in different kind of paid work. Some people regard this as a completely wrong, while others consider it a valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. What is your opinion?

Today, we can see that children as a paid
workers
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worker
in the different countries. Regarding
this
, some people think that
child
labour should not be allowed, while other critics believe that it to be beneficial for
child's development
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a child's development
the child's development
.
However
, in my opinion, children should not be allowed to do
a
expresses position, direction or location, or point in time
at
work as it relieves them
for
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of
in
their
childhood
.
To begin
with, it is a fact that the
childhood
is the most essential for their academic growth by which they can build their career. Regarding of
this
age, pupils should focus on their
study
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studies
and to explore their area of interest for the best opportunities.
In contrast
, if students are focusing on the work, they will never be able to identify their real capabilities and will end up with doing the same job in which they are exposed.
For instance
, in the oriental countries, more than a quarter percentage of school level students did not enter in the professional courses like medical and engineering
,
Accept space
,
because of their lack of an education due to more interest towards their paid
works
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work
.
Hence
, the better educational improvements of
childeren
a young person of either sex
children
is
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are
the major reason to protect them from doing the job in
childhood
. Another important fact
is most
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is, most
of
child
labour are usually exploited and mistreated by the employers at their workplace.
This
is the major and
serious concern
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a serious concern
as it
adversely impact
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adversely impacts
on
child's mind
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the child's mind
a child's mind
.
Therefore
, having a bad experiences
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a unit of surface area equal to 100 square meters
are
or
at
the younger age, sometimes
develope
make something new, such as a product or a mental or artistic creation
develop
a negative mindset in children and they are driven towards the criminal activities.
Similarly
, most of
terrorists
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the terrorists
had faced the same situation regarding the negative mindset during their
childhood
age, according to the famous psychologists of the world. In conclusion, the practice of employing children as a paid
workers
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worker
would not be encouraged in any country as it would prevent them from leading an educational and safe
childhood
.
Submitted by Dhruv on

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