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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree of disagree with this statement?

#country #language
Living abroad where individuals have to communicate through a foreign
language
 is considered as a negative trend, because of crucial issues with society and several practical problems. I disagree with the statement above and the reasons and examples supporting my position follow below. Nowadays people can migrate to a foreign
country
 without huge problems,
thus
, it can rapidly integrate them
to
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into
 a society and the
language
 of the
country
. I am certain that they do it for better job, education or environment. To be specific, thousands of adults and adolescents move from Kazakhstan to the countries of Europe, along with America and China, due to minor salaries, which reduce their quality of life and bring to
uncertain future
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an uncertain future
uncertain futures
the uncertain future
.
Therefore
,
migration
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the migration
 provides an opportunity to start a new life, whereas a foreign
language
 is not considered as a significant problem, because handling
with it
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with, it
 seems to be a matter of indifference in comparison with an expectation of a future happy being.
Although
 humans who have migrated to another
country
 tend to have misunderstandings about a culture or a
language
 of the
country
, there are numerous solutions for these issues,
such
 as online translators, guides about a society and slangs.
For instance
, they can use mobile applications which involve these opportunities to understand co-workers, average citizens, even assistants in shops in order to communicate with them without any doubts. To conclude,
such
 arguments as an uncomplicated foreign
language
 compared to the chances to construct a new way of being, along with modern translators and guides buttress my position that living in an another
country
 will not necessarily form tremendous social and practical problems.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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