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Every year large number Of people migrate from one country to another for different reasons discussed the advantages and disadvantages Of migration for the individual and for society as a whole

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There are various reasons that huge quantity Of individuals move from one nation to another annually. It has some merits and demerits for a
person
 and on a community as whole. In
this
 essay, I will be discussing both.
To begin
 with, when a
person
migrate
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migrates
 from a
devoloping
relating to societies in which capital needed to industrialize is in short supply
developing
country
 to developed
country it
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country, it
 is very beneficial for him because he had
better job opportunity
Suggestion
a better job opportunity
 which helps them to live
better life
Suggestion
a better life
better lives
.
Moreover
, it
also
 helps society in economic growth
for
example if
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example, if
 a
person
 is working he pays Tax to government which help to increase
states
Suggestion
state
 fund.
In addition
,
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,
 some people
believes
Suggestion
believe
 that their children will have that better future in the developed
country
such
 as modern lifestyle and good quality of studies. On the other sides, there are some cons for an individual and society as
well
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well, such
such
 as when a
person
 moves to a new nation it’s very hard for him to settle down.
Besides
 that migration
also
 decreases the economic growth of the
country
 from where one
person
 moves which created world inequality. On the top of
that some
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that, some
 people start doing illegal activities to survive in
new community
Suggestion
a new community
the new community
.
For example
 - drug dealing, working
illegal
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illegally
 without work permits. Recently, in Canada a student got deported for
act
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acts
 against the law as he was working more than 20 hours per week as an international student. In
conclusion I
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conclusion, I
pendown
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pen down
 saying that migration has its pros and cons side by side.
Although
 every year, there is
increase
Suggestion
an increase
 in amount of peeps migrating to other nations.
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