The government should allocate more fund to the educational sector than health sector. At what extend do you agree other disagree.

#government #fund #sector #health

Allocating

fund

Suggestion

funds

on various public sector generally creates controversy. Some argue that higher priority be given to

health sector

Suggestion

the health sector

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whereas others consider it must be

education

Suggestion

educated

.In my opinion

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nevertheless

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I consider investing a larger proportion to

education

and

it's

of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"

its

related area would benefit than

health

sector as educated society would automatically improve their

health

status by knowledge.

Firstly

, spending money on

education

would bring encourage more and more people to start learning including from economically

deprivide

marked by deprivation especially of the necessities of life or healthful environmental influences

deprived

section.

This

gradually improve

Suggestion

gradually improves

standard of

health

conditions

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conditions, hence

hence

literates society know how to handle

situation

Suggestion

the situation

situations

a situation

in a better manner. To illustrate

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a recent research has conducted to understand the relationship between

education

and

health

This

shows that children of educated mother had less communicable diseases compared to

illitrate

not able to read or write

illiterate

illustrate

mother;

therefore

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it is evident that

education

required more investment. Another point is to consider is that

education

bring about better job

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

140 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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The government should allocate more fund to the educational sector than health sector. At what extend do you agree other disagree.

Include an introduction and conclusion

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What can be done to deal with this situation?

Some people think it would be better if the whole family (uncles, aunts, and grandparents) were involved in bringing up children rather than only parents.

You recently attended a cookery class and enjoyed it. Now you want to provide feedback to the cookery school. Write a letter to the cookery school. In your letter: Describe the cookery class you attended. Explain what you enjoyed about the class. Suggest some improvements to the class.