It is widely believed that people's ability to learn new things decreases with age and that companies should actively recruit younger employees who have great potential to learn. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Some people

beleive

accept as true; take to be true

believe

that as

work

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force get older, their potential of learning declines,

therefore

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employers should actively recruit

youngesters

a young person of either sex

youngsters

for the company, whereas others determine that older individuals are

neccessary

absolutely essential

necessary

since

Suggestion

for

their experience are higher than younger one. I totally disagree that companies should intensively increase the number of young workers.

First

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of all, if

changement

Suggestion

apply

for

Suggestion

the company, the probability of learning and adapting that thing would be higher in older workers as far as

changement

Suggestion

connecting

Suggestion

connected

to their

workfield

Suggestion

work field

since experienced workers tend to have already faced

certain revolution

Suggestion

a certain revolution

while they are working in

this

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industry.

Therefore

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, it might be easy to take that difference by using previous experience even if it is in different working field.

Secondly

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, Most of the young workers tend to spend a massive amount of time just for adapting their new

work

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environment and team.

Morever

in addition

Moreover

, the maturity of those young individuals

are

Suggestion

lower than those of

olders

plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned

others

elders

orders

as well as youngsters are mostly

fail

Suggestion

failing

defense

Suggestion

defend

defence

their own

work

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since society tend to take someone who are

matured

Suggestion

mature

enough.

Therefore

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youngesters

a young person of either sex

youngsters

might study new thing rapidly compared to

older generation

Suggestion

the older generation

however

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applying those things that they learnt into practice might not as fast as what

they

of them or themselves

their

employers

beleive

accept as true; take to be true

believe

Thirdly

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, According to the some health science magazines, it is proven that

human

Suggestion

the human brain's ability

brain

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's ability of learning something new is not decreased because of aging.

However

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, if someone does not

develope

make something new, such as a product or a mental or artistic creation

develop

or maintain their

brain

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function by learning or exploring new things, the activation of the

brain

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cells of that part would be paralysed.

Therefore

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, by that

mean

Suggestion

means

, if someone

learn

Suggestion

learns

consistently, The

brain

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activity will remain active no matter of the ages.

Therefore

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Accept space

there is no point in

descriminating

showing or indicating careful judgment and discernment especially in matters of taste

discriminating

people by their ages. To sum up, Unless the

work

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is not physical

work

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in which younger age can be

advantage

Suggestion

advantageous

, workers should not look for young

work

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force based on unproven belief.

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