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Many regions in the world rely on tourism for the revenue it generates. However, some people complain about the problems that come with tourism. What are some of these problems and how can they be solved?

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Nowadays,
tourism
 is the prominent source of income for many countries. It is often argued by some people that the
tourism
 activities create some serious issues to the hosting nation.
This
 essay will
first
 discuss the threats associated with the growing
tourism
, and
then
 suggest the viable solution.
First
 of all, with the rise in the
tourism
 industry, there comes a serious threat of the illegal immigration. While some of the bad elements of the society visit foreign countries with the agreed purpose of
tourism
 only,
on the other hand
, they try to find unlawful ways to settle permanently in that particular area.
For example
, in year 2018, hundreds of the people from South Asia were arrested by the Federal Police
of
Suggestion
in
 the United States who tried to become the permanent resident by wrong methods. Despite of the highly strict
visa
 policies,
such
 criminals enter foreign countries with the help of the visitor visas. As a solution to the above stated problem associated with the growth of the
tourism
, the
visa
 offices are required to be more strict and careful prior to the grant of the permit to the people of the suspected regions.
Although
visa
 officers keep an eye on
such
 people, there is a significant need to maintain a black list in which suspicious parts of the world are marked and the
grant
Suggestion
granting
 of any kind of
visa
 to the people who belong to any of these
place
Suggestion
places
 should be blocked.
For example
, in the black list of the United States Immigration Agency, Iran and North Korea have been marked. Every immigration organisation should follow the same approach so that
such
 harmful drawbacks can be overcome.
Tourism
 is ever growing
sector which
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sector, which
 has enormous potential to make lucrative profits. While along with the tourists, there comes the issue of illegal immigration, which can be resolved by the implementation of strong
visa
 policies by the
visa
 authorities.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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