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Topic: Nowadays, more people would rather purchase food than cook at home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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Içn recent years, many people prefer to buy
food
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instead
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 of cooking for themselves.
This
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 behaviour has its pros and cons, which will be explained in
this
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 essay. On the one hand, foods that can be bought is becoming increasingly popular among people of all
class
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classes
 due to some reasons
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 as its affordability, how fast it can be gotten and the availability of a wide range
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of
 varieties to choose from.
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, with £2, I was able to buy a meal of chicken wings and
chips but
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chips, but
 O needed about £5 to cook myself a decent meal.
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, the advantages of purchasing
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, as opposed to home cooking is obvious.
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, the hygiene in the process of fast
food
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 preparation is questionable, as it can often be compromised, since the aim of fast
food
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 businesses is to meet the demands of as many customers as possible. Research has
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 shown that there is a highly reduced
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levels
 of health benefits in processed foods.
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, oils with high levels of bad cholesterol are sometimes used.
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, some of the ingredients would have been stored for a long time? Which could be beyond its expiry date. As these practices cannot be readily controlled, it can be seen that the purchase of meals is disadvantageous
.
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 To conclude, while packaged
food
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 is gaining more acceptance in the society, it is
worthy
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worth
 to know that despite its benefits include the fact that it is cheaper, faster and provides varieties, It
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 has some drawbacks.
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 includes compromised hygiene and health values.
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