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Write an essay to an educated reader to discuss both advantages and disadvantage of advertising. Include reasons and any revelant examples to support your answer.

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Modern world today, advertisements are ubiquitous and almost all business
sector
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sectors
 would
advertising
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advertise
 their products for
the great
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greater
 success.
However
,
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,
this
 trend would stimulate sales and make them have the huge profits to their companies.At the same time failing in the family budgeting and creating the feel of deficiency among
customer
 are the two main
drow
cause to move by pulling
draw
 back of
this
. On the one hand, advertisements bring financial growth to the producer as their products get market reach and increase the sales.The adverts
makes
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make
customer
 buy
them
of them or themselves
their
 products since they have understood how
this
 product improves their day to day life.To illustrate
,
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,
washing machines
,
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,
they have saved time and replaced boring a job effectively.
Thus
, it is a win win situation for
customer
 and producer.
On the other hand
,
advertising products
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advertising, products
may not be give
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may not give
may not be given
 the indent results if they cannot meet the target
popullation's
the people who inhabit a territory or state
population
 requirements.
Moreover
,
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,
this
 may tarnish the company's reputation entirely.Regarding
customer
 advertisements may create false need of certain products and started to buy them without thing
further
.Eventually
,
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,
consumer
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consumers
the consumer
 may
endups
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end ups
 in running out of his family budget and bankruptcy.These are the main issues of advertisements. In conclusion, advertisements have both positives and negatives;
nevertheless
, until do take
you
of you or yourself
your
 wise action nobody fall in these kinds of pitfalls.
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