The charts below show the distribution of the world's water and the use of water in three countries.

The charts below show the distribution of the world's water and the use of water in three countries.
The pie chart illustrates the proportion of global
water
and the bar graph gives information about
water
use in Egypt, Saudi Arabia and Canada.
Overall
, it is very clear that in
pie
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a pie
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chart, salt
water
built up
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a major
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part of the global
water
. At the same time, a minor part is only left for use. In the bar graph,
water
used
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in Agriculture
in
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a significant proportion
whereas
least
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amount of
water
is used for
household
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. When it comes to Global
water
, salt
water
makes up
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97%.
In contrast
,
Fresh
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water
is accounted for just a minor proportion
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only 3%. By digging into fresh
water
which
consist
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of only 3%, ice and glacier
covers
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around 79%. Total
Ground
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water
consist
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of 20% and just about 1% makes up
surface level
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water
.
Furthermore
,
water
used in agriculture in Egypt is 80% and in Saudi Arabia slightly below 80%.
However
, in
Canada
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,Canada
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only 10% is used for agriculture. Industrial usage of
water
is higher in Canada about 80%.
In contrast
, just below 10% is used in Egypt and
exact
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10% in Saudi Arabia. Nearly Domestic use of
water
is around 10% in these three countries
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