The charts below show the distribution of the world's water and the use of water in three countries.

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The pie chart illustrates the proportion of global

water

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and the bar graph gives information about

water

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use in Egypt, Saudi Arabia and Canada.

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, it is very clear that in

pie

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a pie

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chart, salt

water

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built up

major

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a major

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part of the global

water

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. At the same time, a minor part is only left for use. In the bar graph,

water

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used

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is used

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in Agriculture

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a significant proportion

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least

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amount of

water

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is used for

household

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households

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. When it comes to Global

water

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, salt

water

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makes up

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apply

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97%.

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Fresh

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Freshwater

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water

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is accounted for just a minor proportion

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only 3%. By digging into fresh

water

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which

consist

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consists

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of only 3%, ice and glacier

covers

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cover

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around 79%. Total

Ground

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Groundwater

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water

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consist

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consists

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of 20% and just about 1% makes up

surface level

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water

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Furthermore

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water

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used in agriculture in Egypt is 80% and in Saudi Arabia slightly below 80%.

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, in

Canada

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,Canada

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only 10% is used for agriculture. Industrial usage of

water

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is higher in Canada about 80%.

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, just below 10% is used in Egypt and

exact

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exactly

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10% in Saudi Arabia. Nearly Domestic use of

water

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is around 10% in these three countries

jerseynani3Fri Jul 26 2019

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

195 words

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The charts below show the distribution of the world's water and the use of water in three countries.

Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

The best way that a government can reduce the traffic congestion in cities is to provide public transport free of cost to people 24 hours a day and 7 days a week. To what extent do you agree or disagree?