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In many countries, the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think are the main causes of crime? How can you deal with those causes?

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The escalated trend of
crime
 is observed in various countries.
This
 essay will examine the critical reasons of
this
 trend, followed by possible solution.
First
 of all, It is proven that many of violation is induced by poverty.
Moreover
, the poor people participate the stealing without bad intention since they need to feed their starving children or family. Because
most popular reason
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the most popular reason
 for insufficient income is unemployment,
first thing
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the first thing
 we need to deal with is
increase
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increasing
 the number of
workplace
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workplaces
 and decrease the work requirement as most of the underprivileged individuals tend
to left
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to leave
 behind education. To accomplish that, It is essential that the positive cooperation between authorities and
stakeholders including
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stakeholders, including
 employees, employers, advocacy group. non-governmental organisation
Secondly
, According to the national police statistics, it is demonstrated that
illeteracy
the ability to read and write
literacy
 level has
significant association
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a significant association
to
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with
 the
crime
.
Moreover
, considering the
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 articles, It is evidenced that more educated people tend to have more ability to
descriminate
recognize or perceive the difference
discriminate
disseminate
 that what is wrong and what is right based on critical thinking.
Therefore
,
Government
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the Government
 should control the governing agency to make sure that they are completely
implementing
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implemented
 the education policy of the community.
Furthermore
,
Highscool
a public secondary school usually including grades 9 through 12
highschool
 curriculum should involve the
class including
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class, including
 the prevention of
crime
, regarding the
unaccaptable
not adequate to give satisfaction
unacceptable
 consequence of the wrong decision since adolescents are easier to prompt anything new. Overall,
Although
 there are tons of reasons hiding behind the every scene, poor education and poverty are most popular cause of the
crime
.
Therefore
, solving
this
 basic problem will produce
unexpected but
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unexpected, but
enormous result
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the enormous result
 against the problem.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic disparity
  • propensity
  • recidivism
  • deterrent
  • rehabilitative
  • judicial system
  • corruption
  • socioeconomic
  • alienation
  • stigmatization
  • decriminalization
  • enforcement
  • gentrification
  • preemptive measures
  • intervention strategies
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