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The best way to understand other cultures is to work for a multinational organisation To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#cultures #work #organisation
Culture
 is the
way
 of life of a particular set of people and it is believed by some that the most effective method of understanding other cultures is by working for an international organization.
However
, I completely disagree with
this
 view because they are several other ways to get accustomed to other cultures which includes
;
Accept space
;
learning from the
internet
 and migration.
To begin
, I tend to disagree that the most preferable
way
 to understanding a new
culture
 is working for an international organization because most organizations have an official
language
that is
 being spoken.
Although
 many people hail from different countries to work
in
Suggestion
with
 these kind of companies, yet it is almost always basically for official purpose and there may not be time for social activities.
Hence
, the
language
 spoken and mode of dressing might have to be official as well,
therefore
,
this
 is likely not to give maximum opportunity to learn other important aspects of
culture
one
 is interested in. For
this
 reason, not possibly is
this
 the best method of getting accustomed to other cultures.
Nevertheless
, I believe that the
internet
 is a better means of learning
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
culture
.
One
 can easily browse the
internet
, search for and get useful information about the
culture
 to be understood;
language
, food, dressing and other non-material aspect.
Furthermore
, the use of the social media sites
such
 as WhatsApp, Facebook and Instagram, to mention a few, could
also
 be beneficial. Easy will it be to find and make friends with foreign citizens, chat with them and get useful and detailed information about all aspects of their
culture
. By and large,
this
 is
one
 easy
way
 of learning and understand other cultures.
Finally
, my most compelling argument is to immerse and acclimatize oneself in a foreign country and
this
 can be achieved through migration. With
this
,
one
 would be able to learn evidently and adjust fully to the new environment and
culture
 being learned.
This
 is possibly the best
way
 of learning a foreign
culture
. In
conclusion
Accept comma addition
conclusion, although
although
 working for a multinational establishment could expose
one
 to learning a foreign
language
, I strongly believe that it is not
such
 an effective method as perusing the
internet
 and social media sites to source for information or getting fully acclimatized in the foreign country through migration.
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