The only way to solve the increasing crime rate of young offenders is to teach parents better parenting skills. To what extent do you agree?

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The increase in

juvnile

of or relating to or characteristic of or appropriate for children or young people

juvenile

crime

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rate is

major concern

Suggestion

a major concern

the major concern

of the civilised society. The sizable

protion

something determined in relation to something that includes it

portion

younge

(used of living things especially persons) in an early period of life or development or growth

young

criminals belongs to poor families, where parents are not able to devote time for proper teaching to the children. I support the view that the

crime

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rate can be controlled by proper parenting techniques.

To begin

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with, the juvenile criminal are

forces

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forced

in to

expresses motion to a point on, or within, something

into

crime

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by circumstances due to lack of basic facility. They may not get proper food and clothes from poor

gurdians

something that provides direction or advice as to a decision or course of action

guidance

guardians

, so they may resort to stealing of

this

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things

Suggestion

thing

Furthermore

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the habit of stealing leads them eventually to bigger

crime

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where the situation goes out of control and

lend

reach or come to rest

land

them in prison.

For example

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, many juvenile

home

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homes

has

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have

criminal

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a criminal

who has been caught

shop lifting

the act of stealing goods that are on display in a store

shoplifting

and goes to jail

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where they come in contact with

seasoned criminal

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the seasoned criminal

and learn bigger crimes

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Therefore

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, if parents

provides

Suggestion

provide

them with basic needs and good habits they will not travel on

path

Suggestion

the path

a path

crime

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On the other hand

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, the parental education and training is very important to impart good habits in children. The children learn what they observe

therefore

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parents need to stop bad habits like drinking

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smoking and using bad language in front of children, which is very common in slum areas or poor families.

Thus

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, the majority of young person lands in

criminal act

Suggestion

criminal acts

a criminal act

obersving

quick to notice; showing quick and keen perception

observing

their parents without giving much thought to

consequences

Suggestion

the consequences

. To illustrate

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many juvenile criminal admits that they have been

resort

Suggestion

resorting

crime

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by observing their parents drinking or gambling in front of them. So the education of parent is equally

imporant

of great significance or value

important

as their children. I

conlude

decide by reasoning; draw or come to a conclusion

conclude

concluded

that the young

offendres

a person who transgresses moral or civil law

offenders

are

reflection

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a reflection

of the community they have been

borugh

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brushed

brush

bough

up. The government can focus on slum areas and poor people where they can be taught about basic parenting skills. To educated parent with proper parenting technique is the best way to stop

rise

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the rise

in juvenile

crime

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rates.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

326 words

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The only way to solve the increasing crime rate of young offenders is to teach parents better parenting skills. To what extent do you agree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

In many countries, the number of animals and plants is declining. Why do you think this is happening? How can this issue be solved.

In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food?

Some people think that businesses should provide sports facilities for employees. Others consider that a person’s health is their own responsibility, not a company’s problem. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people believe online materials should only be used for children to learn to read. while other believe only printed reading materials should be used. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

In some cities public parks and open spaces are being changed into gardens where the local residents can grow their own fruit and vegetables. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantage?