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Many people believe that education and high qualifications will bring success. Others think that it’s not required to achieve success in life. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #education #qualifications #success #it’s #life
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In
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 fast developing world, there are different opinions to being
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a successful person
. Some number of people around the world they believed that
education
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 and qualification both are crucial for
success
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, while other groups of people who argues
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these types
this type
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 getting
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. In
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 essay, I discuss both
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sides
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 phenomenon before reaching my own opinion. On the one hand, it is true that ‘higher
education
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 is key to get
success
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 in their
life
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’.
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, if people have enough knowledge and qualification, so that they should have ability to evaluate any inimical issue, which come
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life
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lives
, without taking wasting much more time on it.
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, in a recent survey
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at
 Oxford University from the United States, almost 90% of people who achieved their
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 because they all are qualified with highest percentage ranks.
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, it is understandable the argument that more emesis should be put on higher
education
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 On the other hands, some number community strongly deem that if people have a different
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type
 of skill in their
life
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 so they never face problem regards to their
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work varies
. For latest and relevant example is that the prime minister of Indian
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Narendra
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 things, they achieved all
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, which came in his entire
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. Agglomerating, all the points elaborated above, it can be concluded that the
education
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 and
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 kills, both are crucial for achieving
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in people
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in a person's life
in person's life
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