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You are about to go on a vacation for a month. A friend from another town will come and stay in your apartment. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter •​Explain where your friend can get the key to the apartment •​Give your friend some instructions about using your apartment •​Recommend some places to go

Dear Adam, How are you? I hope you’ve been well. I’m just writing to give you some information about my
apartment
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, where you can stay as much time as you want to .Well, I’m going to Alberta tomorrow, which means that you’ll need to collect the keys from Mr. Smith. He lives in
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 36 on the same street and is a good friend of mine. I’ve already told him about you, making it easy for you to meet him and take the keys. Talking about some favour that I’d like you to do for me in the
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, kindly switch on the solar panel connection from my drawing room every morning and switch it off in the evening.
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 is very important as the connection might
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 start malfunctioning.
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, don’t play loud music after 11 pm as it disturbs neighbours. As for outings, I’d suggest you go to North Country Mall. There you’ll find all the stuff of your choice as it has some traditional North-Indian showrooms. Don’t forget to hang out with your colleagues at “Pirates of Grills” just the backside of the
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/ Don’t forget to enjoy your favourite tandoori dishes at “Pirates of Grills” just the backside of the
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. Feel free to call anytime to ask anything about the
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. Keep in touch. / See you soon. Harry

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coherence and cohesion
To improve logical structure, try using more transitional phrases to guide the reader through the text.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main idea for clarity.
greeting closing
The letter opens with a friendly greeting and closes with a warm farewell, enhancing readability and establishing a personal touch.
task achievement
The task response is complete, addressing all required points with clear and relevant information for the friend.
suitable writing tone
The writing tone is appropriate, maintaining a friendly and helpful nature throughout the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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