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Some people believe that the only purpose of films is to entertain. But other say film should have educational value. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Modern world today
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watching cinema is
quite
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Quite
 normal
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Although
 it is sometimes thought that film is a great source of
entertainment
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other people think that
this
 can be served the purpose of education.In my opinion
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I consider films are both educative and informative. On the one hand
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some consider film industry is purely meant for
entertainment
 purposes.
In other words
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Cinemas which have the elements of fun
such
 as music
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stories
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visual treat
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dance and comedy and these factors contributing high standards
ofenjoyment
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of enjoyment
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Moreover
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viewers can unwind themselves when they
exhousted
drained of energy or effectiveness; extremely tired; completely exhausted
exhausted
 after a hectic schedule or escape from
boring day
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the boring day
 to day life.
Thus
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the majority of critics label films as
a
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an
entertainment
media
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medium
.
On the other hand
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some believe that big screen can be educative for its audience.To illustrate
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sci-fi films depict complicated science formula which is simplified
into
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in
laymen
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layman's
laymen's
 terms which definitely give insight into how science
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change radically
revolutionized
 our society
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Furthermore
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people who interested in learning of history, geography and various
concept
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concepts
also
 possible;
therefore
, Cinema is a medium
that is
 entirely dedicated
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to
 education,
Finally
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I wonder
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many films are created in a way to entertain society as well as provide information on something
relevent
having a bearing on or connection with the subject at issue
relevant
irrelevant
 to the society
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the combination of both.Rarely does cinema only for entertainments
instead
 they
also be
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also are
are also being
 full of information. In conclusion
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While people are divided into two as some argue that the film is for
entertainment
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others
clam
assert or affirm strongly; state to be true or existing
claim
 it is for education.
However
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I take the view of both.
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