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In recent years, more and more people are choosing to read e-books rather than paper books. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages of this trend?

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It is true that there is a tendency toward switching to read digital books
instead
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 of the conventional way of reading.
Although
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this
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 trend exists both pros and cons, I believe its advantages outweigh its drawbacks On the one hand, the biggest disadvantages of reading e-books is that they require us to stare at a screen for a very long time,
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 can be
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detrimental to our
 eyes. More and more children have vision problems in the modern world because of the excessive use of digital devices.
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,
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 issue could be tackled by applying a vision protection screen for computers or smartphones as well as wisely managing our time spend on digital screens.
On the other hand
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, there are numerous benefits
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of
 reading electronic books.
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, e-books are more convenient and handy, since they only require a small space to store and easily carry them around,
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compared
 to
paper
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 books, which we have to limit the number of books when bring them along. Another advantage is that we can receive e-books immediately after we download them to our devices, while buying
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paper book
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paper books
a paper book
 online consumes at least one day or even a week for the order to be delivered. Importantly, digital books
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are
 environmentally friendly, since they do not require
paper
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, which means that no trees has been cut down to produce e-books. In conclusion, since e-books bring a vast number of advantages in many aspects. They do not require woods to manufacture
paper
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, not occupy physical space to store and they are portable.
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, their disadvantage could be negligible by using the protection screen or limiting time
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spent
 on reading.
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