Some people think that money is the best gift for teenagers. Others disagree. discuss both these views and give you opinion.

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Finding the ideal birthday
gift
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is not an easy task,
especialy
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
specially
for teenagers.
Although
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we may think we know what our children want, many
timess
a more or less definite period of time now or previously present
times
we are mistaken and
this
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can cause
unwnted
not wanted; not needed
unwanted
reactions. From
this
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reason, some people think that giving
money
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as a
rpresent
give an exhibition of to an interested audience
present
is the best option. Others, including
myself do
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myself, do
not. Giving a certain sum of
money
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as a
gift
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might be an educational lesson because it gives our children financial independence and allows them to use it as they seen fit. By
permiting
consent to, give permission
permitting
them to spend
money
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as they want, we can teach them how to use
money
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wisely and educate them about the value of the object they bought. As an example, if a teenager decides to spend
he's
male possessive pronoun
his
birthday
gift
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on a new pair of
sunglassess
spectacles that are darkened or polarized to protect the eyes from the glare of the sun
sunglasses
, he will learn how much it cost and
as a result
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will
appriciate
recognize with gratitude; be grateful for
appreciate
appreciated
them more and will not
loose
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
them easily.
In contrast
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to the above mentioned, many think that giving our teenagers
money
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as a
gift
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is a bad
iadea
the content of cognition; the main thing you are thinking about
idea
ideal
because children are easily manipulated and will end up spending their
money
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on useless objects rather than things they truly need. During
this
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period of maturation, and
especialy
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
since the introduction of smartphones, children are exposed to many hidden commercials that can shift their attention and focus, leading them to think they need something they don't. As a consequence, they can spend their
money
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on less important objects,
instead
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of other things that may
assisst
give help or assistance; be of service
assist
them in the future.
For example
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, teenagers might buy a
hoverboard
to extremes
overboard
because of an advertisement the have seen rather than spending it on a new computer that may help them in school. In my opinion, teenagers should not be given a sum of
money
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for their birthday because I
beieve
accept as true; take to be true
believe
they are not mature enough to make financial
edicions
the form in which a text (especially a printed book) is published
editions
by
them selves
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
. They change their opinions frequently and lack the ability to see and understand what they truly need. An adolescent
can not
can not
cannot
see the importance of buying a new school bag over a video game and can not understand why they need to spend their
money
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on books rather than a new phone. In conclusion, In my
opinion teenagers
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opinion, teenagers
should be given presents that will truly assist them as they are growing up. Once they can understand what is really important,
than
subsequently or soon afterward (often used as sentence connectors)
then
we can give them the decision to buy what they want.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial responsibility
  • budget
  • save
  • informed spending decisions
  • personal preferences
  • practical and efficient
  • unwanted or inappropriate gifts
  • impersonal
  • emotional value
  • thoughtfulness
  • personal consideration
  • wise financial decisions
  • frivolously
  • lasting memories and experiences
  • educational courses
  • hobby-related equipment
  • long-lasting positive impact
  • fostering interests and skills
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