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In many countries, people are living in a "throwaway society" where things are used for a short time and thrown away. what are the causes of this and what problems does it lead to?

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Nowadays, people adopted
such
 a way that
consume
Suggestion
consumes
 things and throw away even though it is very useful. It became a habit because of availability and its consumption, especially in the essential goods.
To begin
 with, the manufacture units are far away from the city and it is a bad choice to deliver consumer products with
recycle
Suggestion
recycled
 or decompose materials. The production cost of
recycle
Suggestion
recycling
recycled
 items is very high.
For example
, 20mm micron non-usable item
productuction
 cost is $2 but reusable product cost is $10. In General, people opt the low-cost items if it is similar quality and quantity of product.
Also
, the availability and reliability of the recycling things are very low in the market and it
is not fulfill
Suggestion
is not fulfilling
is not fulfil
does not fulfil
is not fulfilled
doesn't fulfil
has not fulfilled
 the business needs on expected time. Consume and throw away culture has been introduced by various
companies especially
Accept comma addition
companies, especially
 in food items.
On the other hand
, these used products were dispatched to the garbage; there were
tremendous amount
Suggestion
a tremendous amount
 of non-usable products collected in a day. The non-recycle products are not decomposable that lead to various issues like infection
such
 as malaria, typhoid, etc. It creates a pollution into the sources of Air
,
Accept space
,
water and land; when we try to
cleanup
Suggestion
clean up
 these products; it is another factor that several people affected by cancer who is living near to the garbage warehouse. In conclusion, the method
throwaway
Suggestion
throws away
throw away
 has a lot of benefits to manufacturing industry outweigh of end-users; the non-degradable products creates a huge impact on the society that set up an unhealthy environment. Government and other self organizations need to help the society that creates awareness about various
disease
Suggestion
diseases
 and issues; cite the guidelines to the public as well as industries.

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