Many people strive to maintain a successful career and happy family life at the same time. what problems can this situation cause ? what are the possible solutions ?

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Many try to spend enough quality
time
with their family and
successful
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success
in career at the same
time
. The most
problem
of
this
plural of "this"
these
causes is
exhaustion
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exhausted
and the viable
soultion
a homogeneous mixture of two or more substances; frequently (but not necessarily) a liquid solution
solution
solutions
for
this
problem
is though
publicity
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public
awareness, educating people about
dangers
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the dangers
of working too hard. The principal
problem
associated with spending enough
time
with your loved ones and be successful in your career can
leads
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lead
toward burn out. Burnout is when people both mentally and physically affected due to working too hard and it may no longer continue. As a
results
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result
of
this
people
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person
fellt
a fabric made of compressed matted animal fibers
felt
fell
mental and physical health issues because of working too hard it
directs
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is directed
towards either, breakdown in relationship within the family and poor performance at work.
For
example in
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example, in
a recent government
survey 93
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survey, 93
% CEO's felt they did not spend enough quality
time
with their
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
becuase
for the reason that; on account of
because
of working long hours and
retuned
go or come back to place, condition, or activity where one has been before
returned
home completely exhausted. To tackle
this
problem
the government should launch a publicity campaign in the media and in schools to educate people regards
dangers
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the dangers
of working long hours and not spending quality
time
with their kin. Many people afraid to ask
thier
of them or themselves
their
boss for
time
off work because of the stigma surrounding people
wokring
actively engaged in paid work
working
less hours and normal and
also
they do not share
this problems
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this problem
these problems
with their close ones.
which
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Which
often results
in to
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in
into
a tragic situation in
family
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the family
. A
publicity
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public
awareness could shed some light on
this
difficult
situations
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situation
and allow people to be more open and honest about
thier
of them or themselves
their
there
state of mind.
For example
, a similar initiative program conducted in Japan, resulted as 82%
decreases
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decrease
in
calling
a telephone call to a radio station or a television station in which the caller participates in the on-going program
call-in
sick for work
becuause
for the reason that; on account of
because
of mental fatigue. To conclude,
stricking
sensational in appearance or thrilling in effect
striking
balance between family life and
successful
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success
in
career which
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career, which
can be totally exhausting.
However
,
this
can be solved by initiating
pubic
not private; open to or concerning the people as a whole
public
awareness programs educating people about the dangers of working too hard.
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