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The world of work is rapidly changing and the employees cannot depend on having the same work or the same work conditions for life. Discuss the possible causes and suggest ways to prepare for people to work in the future.

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It is often argued that
law making
the act of making or enacting laws
lawmaking
 authority
are
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is
 solely responsible for making
decision
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decisions
the decision
a decision
 about
citizens
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citizen
citizen's
 lifestyle. While others believe that people can take their own decisions. In my view, the power of inducing decision should be granted to government
upto
 some extent only. With regards to
individual
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individuals
the individual
, in
process
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the process
 of getting sophisticated life they often become part of wrong habits
such
 as: taking drugs, smoking. As
,
Accept space
,
 it
create
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creates
 various health hazards
to
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To
 smokers. On
other hand
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the other hand
, it
induce
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induces
detrimental effect
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a detrimental effect
to
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on
 our society.
Therefore
, those activities should be controlled from
national level
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the national level
a national level
.
For instance
: Imposing higher taxes to smoking products.
Eventhough
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Even though
 people are conscious about their health.
However
,
Accept space
,
due to lack of proper exercise. They even get victim of obesity. From government sector, parks should be established in every nook and corner of
country
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the country
. As a consequence, it motivates people up to some extent. On
other hand
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the other hand
,
government
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the government
 may
banned
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ban
 junk food.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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