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Many people believe that international tourism is a bad thing for their country. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to change this negative attitude towards international tourism?

#people #tourism #country #change #attitude
Along with simplification of travelling processes due to the rise of low-cost airlines and easing of rigorous
regymes
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
regimes
regime
 of borders crossing for representatives of the vast majority of countries, there is
also
 popular opinion that states the negative influence on countries with a lot of
touristic
Suggestion
tourist
tourists
 sights. The main reason
fo
appropriate to; intended for
for
such
 a situation with increasing of
antitouristic
 opinions is
tge
definite article
the
 chaos tourists bring to
streets
Suggestion
the streets
 of
touristic
visited by throngs of tourists
touristy
 places. Indeed, nobody would be satisfied, if they had to face overcrowded pathways on the round-the-clock basis for years.
In addition
, not all the tourists bother themselves to find out information about rules and laws local people live under. In result, unpleasant situations of
disturbing local pace
Suggestion
the disturbing local pace
 of
live
Suggestion
life
 might appear.
Although
 the complete restriction of a tourist flow from certain destinations might seem as a good idea, yet there are less severe measures to change the negative attitude towards international tourism. One of those is to
imform
impart knowledge of some fact, state or affairs, or event to
inform
 tourists about laws implemented in areas they go to.
Moreover
, not only official laws
indroduced
cause to come to know personally
introduced
 by a government should be told, but
also
rules
Suggestion
the rules
 of informal communication as well. These measures could prevent tourists from making mistakes and acting
impolite
Suggestion
impolitely
 just due to the reason of not having enough knowledge about a country they are going to visit. At the same time
such
 an action excludes the opportunity for breakings the law to be
aquitted
declared not guilty of a specific offense or crime; legally blameless
acquitted
 due to an actor’s lack of information. Summing up, negative opinions about international tourism can be justified.
However
, there are
also
 ways to improve the situation via increasing of tourists’ awareness about local social attitudes.

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