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The table below shows the cinema viewing figures for films by country, in millions.

The table below shows the cinema viewing figures for films by country, in millions.
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The table compares the
number
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 of millions of
viewers
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 who enjoy four types of
movies
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 (
such
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 as action, romance,
comedy
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 and horror) in four different countries (
India
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,
Ireland
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, New
Zealand
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 and
Japan
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). The table
also
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 shows the total
number
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 of audiences in four specific countries.
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 with, it can be clearly observed from the given table that
India
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 has the highest movie viewing
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number
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a number
the number
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 of action
movies
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, and 8
million
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people
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 choose to watch
this
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 type. Followed by
Ireland
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, New
Zealand
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 and
Japan
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, the
number
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 of 7.6
million
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, 7.2
million
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 and 7.1
million
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viewers
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 respectively.
In addition
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,
India
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 offers the largest ratings for romantic and
comedy
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movies
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, with 7.5
million
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 and 6.5
million
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viewers
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.
Although
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 the smallest person in
Ireland
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 has ever chosen to watch 3.8
million
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 romantic
movies
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; at least 3.9
million
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people
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 like to watch
comedy
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movies
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 in New
Zealand
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.
However
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, New
Zealand
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 and
Japan
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 have the same
number
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 of romantic
viewers
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, with 4.5
million
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,
while
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 the
second
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 largest audience for
comedy
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movies
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 is 5.5
million
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 in
Ireland
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.
On the other hand
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,
India
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 has only 2.5
million
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people
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 watching horror
movies
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, and
Japan
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 has a historical low of nearly 2.2
million
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 in the same category. Despite
this
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,
Ireland
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 has the largest audience rating of 6.4
million
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 terrorist types.
In addition
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, it can be noted that action
movies
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 are the most popular category, with 29.9
million
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viewers
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, followed by romantic [20.3
million
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] and
comedy
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 with 19.9
million
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viewers
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.
However
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, horror is the least popular category, with only 15.8
million
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viewers
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 choosing to watch.
Therefore
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, it is concluded that
India
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 has the most movie viewing figures, with 24.5
million
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people
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 in
movies
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 and 17.8
million
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people
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 watching
movies
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. There are 23.3
million
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viewers
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 in
Ireland
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 following
India
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,
while
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 New
Zealand
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 has the
third
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 highest
number
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 of
viewers
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, with 20.3
million
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, in addition, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, viewers, movies, comedy, india, ireland, zealand, japan, million, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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