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In countries where there is high unemployment, most pupils should be offered only primary education. There is no point in offering secondary education to those who will have no hope of finding a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It
is argue
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is argued
argues
 that
it
it is
it's
 not necessary to offer secondary
education
 for those who have a
liitle
limited or below average in number or quantity or magnitude or extent
little
 chance to find a job while their country has
high unemployment rate
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a high unemployment rate
the highest unemployment rate
highest unemployment rate
. I completely disagree with
this
 view.
Firstly
, secondary
education
 builds several soft skills which are not introduced in primary
education
, making every student ready for their life and career.
Forexample
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For example
, all secondary students have to work on group assignments as well as
presentation
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a presentation
presentations
 which they need to work alongside others, coordinate ideas and manage the team, giving them insights
to
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into
 team spirit, communication and collaboration. Being equipped with
such
 skills will have better chances of getting employed for young students because they are deemed as skilled workforce of the economy.
Secondly
,
baring
the act of excluding someone by a negative vote or veto
barring
 students from secondary
education
 does not contribute to the
economy but
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economy, but
also
 reduces its potential growth. Secondary students are able to adapt to working environment better than primary one.
Moreover
, people with minimal
education
 may seek for jobs
oversea
beyond or across the sea
overseas
at
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in
 developed countries where there is always a demand for migrant labours. Singapore is a good example, where have many people with low
education
 levels working
in
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on
 construction sites and maids working
at
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in
 households. Those oversea jobs bring a large amount of foreign currency to the country. In conclusion, high unemployment rate is an issue of any economy and the government does not offer secondary
education
 for
students which
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students, which
 will not help solve
this
 problem but rather limits the pace of economic growth.
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