Should private schools receive government funding? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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A discussion has been brought forward that whether private educational institutes should receive financial support from
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government
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the government
or not. I believe it will be beneficial for the country and public if finances are given to
government
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schools
instead
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. There is no comparison between the tuition fees charged between the two types of schools.
Firstly
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,
fee
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the fee
a fee
that students pay to study in a private school is not affordable by most of the population and
hence
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only the well settled class of the country which is about 40 percent of
total population
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the total population
can afford to study there. Which means that private schools already receive funds from the wealthy society of the nation in the form of tuition fee.
Secondly
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, Education courses and standards match with various foreign country courses, which concludes that
majority
Suggestion
the majority
of people who are studying in private schools, target to go to abroad for higher studies or work experiences.
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Government
Suggestion
The government
will be wasting its financial resources if they help to educate people who want to help another nation from their studies.
In addition
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to
this
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, there are
number
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a number
of events held in private schools like debating competition or sports gala to polish the student’s confidence and compared to
government
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schools they excel in every field.
For instance
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, during my time
at
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in
government
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-funded
school we
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school, we
once had a competition with a private
school which
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school, which
included numerous activities
such
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as acting, debating, swimming and marathon. The fact is hard to digest that we lost each competition because of lack of funds to do these activities on
daily basis
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a daily basis
. To sum up, it will not be wrong to say that it is better for the
government
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to fund their own governed schools rather than private ones as the students are weaker in every field of life and can do better with a little more funding.

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