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The charts below the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Introduction
Diagrams display a percentage ratio of three different
kind
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kinds
 of nutrients,
such
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 as
sodium
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, saturated fats and added
sugar
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, which typical Americans eat every day
;
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;
 and which may be hazardous to
human's
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human
 health.
Body paragraph 1
First
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chart
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describe
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describes
 a percentage of
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sodium which
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sodium, which
 USA residents may eat per a day. The most
feck
marked by erratic changeableness in affections or attachments
fickle
 of
sodium
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 can be ingested during a dinner. In the minority are two parts - breakfast meals and food for snack. At the
second
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chart
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such
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 as at the
third
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chart there
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chart, there
 is the same percentage of saturated fats and added
sugar
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 for breakfast. In spite of
this
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, gradation of progress payment for snacks is different.
At
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On
In
 the
third
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chart it
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chart, it
 is
grater
greater in size or importance or degree
greater
 than
at
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on
 the
second
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chart
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.
Body paragraph 2
Basically all types of nutrients are distributed in equal proportions, except an added
sugar
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. According to
this
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, it should be mentioned that for dinner Americans consume on
overage
approximating the statistical norm or average or expected value
average
 43 % of
sodium
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, 37 % of saturated
fats
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fat
 and 23 % of added
sugar
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. For lunch percentages like that - 29 % of
sodium
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, 26 % of saturated fats and 19 % of added
sugar
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.
Moreover
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, 14 % of
sodium
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 and by 16 %
for
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of
from
 saturated fats and added
sugar
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 are rank to breakfast.
Hence
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 it appears that Americans can get 14 % of
sodium
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, 21 % of fats and 42 % of
sugar
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 with food during a snack.
Conclusion
All kinds of nutrients which have been mentioned, may bring harmful consequences for
human's
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human
 health if they would be eaten in a great amount.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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