Businesses should hire employees for their entire lives. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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I would have to completely disagree with the statement above. In the following paragraphs I will outline the basic concepts of my position.
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of all, I will least the major disadvantages for employers. On the today's
market
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a
company
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must be very flexible in order to compete with other firms. So, imagine the situation when a
company
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can not
can not
cannot
fire its employees to stay on the
market
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. It will lead to loosing not only a profit, but the clients,
market
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share and competitive ability. Now, imagine the situation when a
company
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is growing fast, everything is good and the
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few years are going to be excellent. So, employers need more people to extend the production.
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, nobody can tell what will happen in a few years. In
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case, employers will be
afraif
filled with fear or apprehension
afraid
to hire a new people and extend their business because they will not be able to fire them if something goes wrong. Another important aspect of
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is that a
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can not
can not
cannot
have the best employees. It
can not
can not
cannot
hire
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better
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without dismissing another employee. What kind of disadvantages will have an
employee
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Employee
in exchange for
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kind of
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security?
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of all, it will be very difficult to find a
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if
one
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is not the best, because an employer does not want to spend money on
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's education.
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,
employer
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an employer
employers
the employer
will not have a chance to fire
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if he does not do his
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well.
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of all, employees with
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kind of security tend not to perfect themselves because after they are hired they can not lose their
job
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. In conclusion, I would like to add that
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statement has some positive aspects
too
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too, such
to such
to to such
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as constancy, a strong spirit of the
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, etc.
This
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system takes place in Japan and some companies succeeded in
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. But I think that the reason of it subsists in the Japanese traditions, the particular cultural features, habits and customs.
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, on today's
market
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here in the United States a
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can not afford to hire employees for their entire life.
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