Popular events like the football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Nowadays, football is the most popular game in the world. We can find there are many different teams who plays
this
football. There are dividing into 3
division
:
division
one
,
division
two
and
division
three. Each divisions have different skills. The skills that they have are depend on the manager. He is the
one
who teachs the player how to play. By playing football, there are many advantages and
disadvantages
.
Firstly
, the team can earn a
lot
of money. If we compare the income in
division
one
and
division
two
are really different. The
division
one
will get more than
division
two
. Because as we know, the team in
division
one
, they shows to the people that they are able to play better than the others.
For example
: David Beckham (the player of Manchaster United). He can earn for about £45.000 £50.000/week. It’s unbelievable. Even the prime minister in the UK just got for about £11O.OOO/
year
.
Secondly
, they can get a
lot
of spectators which makes the income increased. In
one
match, they can earn for about 20 or 30 million pounds. Actually, it’s really high. For
one
ticket (VIP) it can cost us a
lot
of money. I think for about £100 or over.
That is
for
one
person. How if we count for a million person? There are
also
many
disadvantages
: like from the task which says that the releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. Actually, I don’t really agree about that: like 2 weeks or 3 weeks ago, there are 2 fans of Leeds United got shots. And it makes them died. Many people come and give them flowers and
also
the clothes which shown they’re sad about that. There are other sport games like
tennis
.
Tennis
is
also
popular. In playing
tennis
there are
also
have advantages and
disadvantages
.
This
games shows how they against each other. The advantages are can earn a
lot
of money, can attract the spectators (audience). There are
also
have
disadvantages
of
this
games,
for example
:
two
years ago, when
Monica
Sales
and Steffi Graph are on the match. They play against each other
then
,
one
of the Steffi’s fan can’t stand anymore, he killed (shots)
Monica
Sales
. That makes
Monica
Sales
have to stop the game. The people are all thinking to take her to the hospital. Because of that, it makes
Monica
Sales
stopped from playing
tennis
for about a
year
. But now, she has started again. In my opinion, these sport can ease the international tensions and
also
can make death from
year
to
year
become increase. So, it is very dangerous.
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