Popular events like the football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays, football is the most popular game in the world. We can find there are many different teams who plays

this

football. There are dividing into 3

division

one

division

two

and

division

three. Each divisions have different skills. The skills that they have are depend on the manager. He is the

one

who teachs the player how to play. By playing football, there are many advantages and

disadvantages

Firstly

, the team can earn a

lot

of money. If we compare the income in

division

one

and

division

two

are really different. The

division

one

will get more than

division

two

. Because as we know, the team in

division

one

, they shows to the people that they are able to play better than the others.

For example

: David Beckham (the player of Manchaster United). He can earn for about £45.000 £50.000/week. It’s unbelievable. Even the prime minister in the UK just got for about £11O.OOO/

year

Secondly

, they can get a

lot

of spectators which makes the income increased. In

one

match, they can earn for about 20 or 30 million pounds. Actually, it’s really high. For

one

ticket (VIP) it can cost us a

lot

of money. I think for about £100 or over.

That is

for

one

person. How if we count for a million person? There are

also

many

disadvantages

: like from the task which says that the releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. Actually, I don’t really agree about that: like 2 weeks or 3 weeks ago, there are 2 fans of Leeds United got shots. And it makes them died. Many people come and give them flowers and

also

the clothes which shown they’re sad about that. There are other sport games like

tennis

Tennis

also

popular. In playing

tennis

there are

also

have advantages and

disadvantages

This

games shows how they against each other. The advantages are can earn a

lot

of money, can attract the spectators (audience). There are

also

have

disadvantages

this

games,

for example

two

years ago, when

Monica

Sales

and Steffi Graph are on the match. They play against each other

then

one

of the Steffi’s fan can’t stand anymore, he killed (shots)

Monica

Sales

. That makes

Monica

Sales

have to stop the game. The people are all thinking to take her to the hospital. Because of that, it makes

Monica

Sales

stopped from playing

tennis

for about a

year

. But now, she has started again. In my opinion, these sport can ease the international tensions and

also

can make death from

year

become increase. So, it is very dangerous.

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 9.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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435 words

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Popular events like the football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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