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Band 7

You are planning a holiday to Australia. You have been given the name and address of a hotel in the centre of Sydney and would like further information. Write a letter to the hotel. Ask about the availability of the rooms and the hotel's facilities. Find out if the hotel arranges day trips and ask them to send you a brochure. You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write your own address. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir/Madam,

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Dear Sir/Madam, I hope you are doing well, I always choose your
hotel
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 to stay in whenever I plan for my holidays. For
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 time, I am here to know more about the availability of the rooms from the 26th of September to the 15th of October in your
hotel
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. During
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 trip, I want a kind of room where can i spend time with myself
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 enjoying the nature's view. I want a bar, gym, and balcony in my room.
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, double size should be available to have a peaceful sleep at night. A large size of
television
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the television
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 required to enjoy movies to my keep mind busy . As I mentioned, usually I choose your
hotel
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 for several reasons, one of the main reasons is that you provide luxurious services at a very affordable price. That's why I always refer your
hotel
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 to my friends whenever they plan trips to Bombay. Yours sincerely, Inder.

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task achievement
You need to address all parts of the task. Ensure to ask about the hotel's facilities in more detail and inquire if they arrange day trips. Additionally, request a brochure.
coherence cohesion
Try organizing your letter into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a single idea. This improves readability and coherence.
coherence cohesion
Improve the clarity of your request for room features by specifying them clearly and succinctly.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is polite and formal, which is suitable for the context.
coherence cohesion
The letter begins and ends with appropriate greetings and closings, creating a positive impression.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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